Love poem IV
I
The light of Venus, grace of the skies
Shines with vigor in her cloudless eyes
A heavenly joy does dwell in her heart
An innocent love with no disguise
II
Long I delved in the starry sky
Where I believed my love twinkled
Yet she was there and I did not know
Under the sun, a bright spot flickered
(to be continued…)
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