Is my poem any good?

Question

I dont like this poem very much. Is there any improvments I could make to it?

Rainbow

With happyness, comes sorrow.

With excitment,

comes disapointment.

With love,

comes regrets.

With rain,

comes rainbows.

Answer 1

Sorry, but I really don't like it. it needs something. Don't know what? But it dose!

Answer 2

well, just my opinion, instead of just Rainbow, I would maybe call it Circle Rainbow, that's what I get from it anyway.

Answer 3

that sucks my butt. I hate it !!!!go suck penuts!!!loser!!!f**t u~!!!

Answer 4

i like it but you sort of know what its going to say next. i love the one, with love comes regret. i think you should create more on that. go more deeper and beyond the imagination.

Answer 5

First of all I love "Rainbows"...

With rain, comes rainbows...you give a negative point in this matter then follow with positive point to end that is "rainbows" to make  readers follow the lovely feel of something glorious after the heavy rain fall, which is nice.

But the first, second and the third paragraph seem to be "positive points" then follow with negative points which just does not sound right to me...

So if you could change the feel of each paragraph to follow the last "With rain, comes rainbows."  I think it would be a lovely poem in deed!

Answer 6

you ever read Robert Frost....

Answer 7

i like it. but.....is it like sayin the opposite of everything? i mean...whats the point?

smile is to frown

as love is to hatred

i dont know.....