Is my poem good? i'm 14.?

Question

Goodbye.

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So fake; kind on the outside.

So wicked, & heartless on the in.

Forcing me to hide.

Hide under my own skin.

Well guess what?

I'm done.

In my eyes

all your worth are lies.

To me, your nothing but a s**t.

your words, so deep they cut.

Too bad you lost me honey.

I heard i was a good catch, one of a kind.

But to you? I was money.

You'll always be too blind

to relize what you lost.

ME; your daughter.

But, your not the only one to miss out.

i need a mom that's can handle it.

All your capable of it a shout

some screams, throws & a hit.

I'm done; sick ot it.

you, lack of love, the lies.

So, this is my goodbye.

-that was the first one, & i wrote it because of my mom,. she left me in a sense for a man,. & other reasons.

& i wrote another one because of her. here it is.

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Answer 1

I am so sorry for u ..

those poems are amazing ....

Answer 2

Wow !! very direct .. explosion of feelings..cry of heart..

for a14 yrs old that is amazing.. tell U what I think in my humble opinion that U 'll be a great song writer. The talent is there..while I'm sure that nothing replaces mother,  try to stick to what u can get the best of.. Let these feelings promote enthusiasm & a motive 4 u to be a good mother in the future, and not depressed one..good luck

Answer 3

Wow.. that was really deep and sincere. At first I thought you were talking about like a gf/bf but then i kind of read the whole daughter thing. Good Job!

Answer 4

I can sense your hurt, frustration, lack of trust

Writing down our thoughts like that in a poetic way  makes people look and see things that a lot of us hide away. It is like medicine to our soul to put the words on paper.

You are brave to post for all the critics here to look at and I hope that you can one day learn to forgive your mother, She is only human..And humans do make big mistakes!!

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so very sorry...

keep your words flowing as only time and reflection heal the deep wound that has been inflicted on your heart and mind.

Answer 5

ask ur dady to re marry im 14 as well and both my parents are dead

u thnik u have it tough