Is my poem good???? i wrote it like a year ago.

Question

Don't be a fool when I address you

For thou know that I appraise you

Hear my call my harsh cry of love

And breathe my breath as I breathe yours

Find in it the passion of my fascination

Speak my words don't you ignore

For is your fault that I am vast in love

It was you that allured me and with your smile

You tempt the fire, which enwraps my soul to yours

Ardent it grew and like a spirit it flew

To a mountain it rose, and to a cloud it withdrew

Aloft in the air its companion it made,

And beholding such scene as in Heaven is seen

Your beauty out stood far from the brook

And its waters made waves for you to embrace

In such splendor delight my grief became light,

And in the breeze I took flight to see what was night

To the stars I gave gaze, and in their glee became mazed

But to the Earth I took a look, and glory was you

Answer 1

Woooooaa.......I just read your other one and I thought that was good. HOLY WOW! You need to publish a book. I'm actually serious honey.  You should seriously, honestly consider writing a book full of your poetry and get a publisher. You can make serious bucks and, if you like writing, then you'd be doing something you love to do.

If you ever need help with critizism, let me know. Just e-mail me. My e=mail is down below. I check that one the most often.

You really need to consider the job oppertunity. Plus, wherever you work now. You can work there, come home write. Go to work, come home write. I mean, what more could you want! I wish I had the talent that you have. You have the flow, the heart, the mind, the eyesite upon this world, you have it all. You may not hvae the looks, but whoever said poets are hot. I'm not saying your not hot, I just....I'm ramling sorry.

Answer 2

Nice. Sounds good.

Answer 3

i love it

Answer 4

You have talent.  Reminds me of Shakespeare or the Bible.

Answer 5

wow this is so beautiful

Answer 6

dude that's like beautiful...hahah i sound like im on crack...

Answer 7

i like the emotion & especially the latter half of your poem where you connect with Nature so wondrfully.

i would've preferred a simpler sentence form - had to read it twice to really get under it.

keep going ...

Answer 8

A wonderful poem .

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