Is my poem good? please please read and review it's short?

Question

its for my summer schoolcreative writing class. i need to get a good grade on it or else i might flunk.

Princess Banane

Yellow and lean

tall and sharp

Princess Banane is french

But her soul is dark

For she is troubed by demons from h**l

they traveled across the river Styx to devour her soul

they go muhahahah

Princess Banane is considered pretty

Her long yellow hair and her stringy pale skin

Princess Banane

The french banana

I really need to get an A or else! I flunked the real creative writing class so my life depends on this poem being good! i thought it was very well written but that is just me.

Answer 1

well honestly it doesnt rrealy rhyme or make sense and im not saying that to be mean, i just dont want to tell you its awesome and have you flunk.

myabe u should make it something like this

Yellow and lean

sharp and tall

and oh so mean

her soul is black

as black as the deepest seas

but jer true nature was soft

a pale face but pretty and smooth as a shell

but now her soul is troubled

troubled by demons

evil and vicous

brought from h**l

dont be decieved by her long yellow hair

and pale as death skin

because then you will find youreself in despair.

stay away from the two sided princess

princess bonane

the  french banana

Answer 2

how about instead of "they traveled across the river Styx to devour her soul"

YOU put "they traveled across the river Styx and broke out of their shell"

so that it rhymes with h**l above it

then instead of "Her long yellow hair and her stringy pale skin"

PUT "Her long yellow hair lies down her back so stringy"

so it rhymes with pretty