Is my writing any good?

Question

I stared into her eyes, frozen in time. All of my surroundings, and everything in my peripheral vision seemed to fade away, I could still see it, but it's like it didn't matter, nothing was more important than what was happening now. As I stood, locked still, I seemed to notice every detail of her face. Every time her eye moved, or shifted, every time her face twitched, all the things that I don't normally notice stood out as if they were a part of me. I noticed the deep brown of her eyes, but more. The swirl of black and her iris color seemed to rotate, shrinking, but never getting any smaller, as if her pupils were infiinite pits of black, empty, but explosive.

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That's all I have so far.

Answer 1

It's good you're trying, but you suck.

Answer 2

i'm 15 too and  I would have to say this is pretty good (:

wish my boyfriend could write like this too haha

Answer 3

this is great!!!! i love it and it's beautiful. the only thing i would change is the peripheral vision bit cause it's a bit to scientific for me and draws away from the pasion but i absolutly love it !!!!!!!!!!!!! fantastic work

Answer 4

That's pretty deep.

Answer 5

Wow, it's more than good. It's great. :]

Answer 6

its beautiful!

I think you have a future in either writing or perhaps poetry

Have you ever thought about getting your work published?

and will you be MY boyfriend?!

haha

good luck! You have a real talent for writing!