Is my writing any good? ?

Question

Please rate my writing. Give each piece a _/10 please! Constructive criticism is welcomed with open arms and a cuppa tea with mints and a lemon.

Answer 1

OK, I feel obligated to answer this given that I've gone through 7 years of school for English lit and creative writing. I now teach creative writing. The essays I get from kids who want to be an author are astonishingly horrid. I want to crush their hopes so they might move on to something they're good at, but I'd risk my job. So I'll manifest it into this paragraph:

You should give up. Honestly. If I had to critique your writing, I would feel like anyone else would feel if they had a gun to their head and the gunman ordered me to cure AIDS by using only the power of imagination. So I won't critique it, it's way too overwhelming of a task. I'm just saying you should give up. Oh, and don't call yourself Mr. Author. Unless you're 11.. if so, I'm sorry, and you still have time to grasp the pace and structure of good writing.

Answer 2

All three are the same...

"Waves charged at the shore like ranks of an army, bellowing savage war cries."

I love that line. Overall I'd say about 8/10. All the military imagery gets to be overkill. (Pun intended.)

Answer 3

and ascended to the heavens, until they vanished into the heavens

try editing that line by not repeating heavens twice

its pretty good tho

Answer 4

You're writing isn't good.

It's great!

10/10

but i'm confused... it ends with "the".

If you finish it, I would love to hear the rest!

Answer 5

It's pretty good, but what century do you think you're writing in? This seems too old-fashioned for me -- for now. It almost seems like you're trying to hard to sound smart and sophisticated. You don't need to impress people with your vocabulary, you just need to tell a story. You have a good description sense though, and I like your comparisons.

I'll give it a 7/10.

=)  

Answer 6

You have very good word choices and have a pretty good use of adjectives and creating scenery. But you start with "the" too often and it doesn't seem to flow well. Sentence after sentence should flow seamlessly - i.e. relate the previous sentence. I know they do, but to the reader, it doesn't flow.

I would give it a 6.5. =)  

Answer 7

really good 10/10

But theres only one paragraph copied 4 times!

Answer 8

Your first paragraph sounds a bit stiff, and there is barely any sentence variation. Like, you started off with something did this and then something did that, repeat.

You have strong verbs, which is good. I like your second paragraph much more because the sentence structures varied.  

Answer 9

Nice writing and great descriptions.  I would rate this piece a 9.4.  The only thing I would delete would be the part "until they vanished into the heavens".

By saying "they snared their targets and ascended to the heavens", I would leave that they vanished up to the readers imagination.  

Answer 10

Let me suggest these:

Rain poured into the ocean like salt from a salt shaker.

Rain poured into the ocean, as if from The Master's own sterling salt shaker.

Will be glad to offer other suggestions, if you like either of these.

Blessings<><:)

Answer 11

yeah, it seems alright, but y do u have the same story posted 3 times. i liked the description of rain with it being like salt from a salt shaker, but again still y'd u post the same story 3 times?