Is the theme trite or specific lines or both? Which ones? Critique?

Question

You form the phrases of love.

Your words surge

With the undulating tides of your lips

And float to my ears

Where they rest for a fleeting moment

On the last breath of a dying day.

Your words are mine alone,

Transcending time

Until they filter down into my soul,

Making me whole again.

They fill me up,

Quelling the void

Created by the distance

Between two hearts

And rise to claim their home

Amid the celestial perfection

Orbiting around us,

Emblazoning their grace

Upon heaven's gentle skyscape

To remind us of these moments

For all our lives.

They confess their hope

To remain bound to us forever

As their smoldering embers

Bond us together,

Two star-crossed lovers desperately trying

To untangle the web of constellations

That imprisons our emotions.

We'll escape

And search east of the sun

For the glimmer of hope

That arrives with each new day.

Answer 1

Did someone tell you it was trite?  I'd like to ask them why.

Granted, it's not a challenging poem, and its style is a little familiar - like that of an intellectual college student having grown into more maturity.  But for all of that, I'm still impressed by the crisp word choice and the overall organization.  I'd consider dropping "star-crossed lovers" even if it fits the poem, just because that is cliche.

Would you consider changing "float to" to "moor at", which implies floating but half-implies staying there and evokes more imagery?  Up to you.