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Question

1.Factors that affect our personalities and behaviours have been the centre of controversy in modern scientific field. While researches show that the born characteristics play a major role in determining individual’s developments, opponents allege that human’s consciousness and behaviour are mainly influenced by surroundings and experience.

2. In conclusion, we can not deny the importance of experience to common people as skills and views are gained and changed through accumulated experience.

However, born characteristics, to a large extent have decided personal views to the world will play as a more initiative role in personal development.

Answer 1

1) Factors which affect our personalities and behaviours have been a highly controversial and debatable issue in modern scientific field. Many contemporary researchers support the theory that innate characteristics play a major role in determining individual’s developments. On the other hand, many other researchers don't agree with this notion and say that human’s consciousness and behaviour are mainly influenced by surroundings and experience.

2. In conclusion, it is evident that the importance of experience to common people can not be denied as skills and views are gained and changed through accumulated experience.

However, it is observed that born characteristics have been proved, to a large extent, that they play and will play a major and initiative role in personal development.

  

Answer 2

1.Factors that affect our personalities and behaviours have been at the centre of controversy in the modern scientific field. While research has shown that innate characteristics play a major role in determining the development of the individual, opponents allege that human consciousness and behaviour are primarily influenced by environment and experience.

2. In conclusion, the importance of experience cannot be denied as skills and [attitudes] [views] [opinions] [outlooks]  are acquired and changed through accumulated experience.

The next part is difficult to understand. This is my suggestion, but I can't be sure of your intended meaning.

To a large extent innate characteristics determine personal attitudes to the world and play a fundamental role in personal development.