Is there someone can help me to revise and improve my English essay please?

Question

Is there someone can help me to revise and improve my English essay please?

You can type it in a word document and send it to my email, which is

[e-mail]

Here is my essay below.

http://www.badongo.com/file/10956671

or

http://www.sendspace.com/file/w2px3x

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!

Answer 1

improve your own essay,

otherwise its not yours is it

Answer 2

How does the site work anyway? I don't know turkish enough! How should I download your essay on badongo.com?