Is this Introduction paragraph good? Please help. A compare and contrast essay.?

Question

“I am a white man and never forgot it, but I was brought up by the Cheynne Indians from the age of ten.” Open up to the first chapter of Little Big Man by Thomas Berger and the first sentence is about the main character, Jack Crabb in the novel. The first sentence of the first chapter in the book, The Count of Monte Cristo by Alexandre Dumas does not directly describe the main character of the novel. It is not until the end of the third paragraph, that the main character, Edmond Dantès is discreetly announced to the reader. “Next to the pilot, who was preparing to guide the Pharaon through the narrow entrance to the port of Marseille, stood a young man, alert and sharp eyed, supervising every moment of the ship and repeating each of the pilot’s commands.” The place of the two statements in the novel and their contents reveal much about the two novels. The Little Big Man takes place in America, The Count of Monte Cristo occurs in Europe. The Little Big Man is short and to the point, to where the Count of Monte Cristo drags on in detail. The stories of Jack Crabb and Edmond Dantès occur an ocean apart in different contexts yet both jump out with adventures occurring around the 1800s. Both novels take the readers to different parts of the continents. The novels are full of history lessons, while the point of view changes in The Count of Monte Cristo and remains the same in The Little Big Man. Jack Crabb and Edmond Dantès take on different personas, though for different reasons. Dantès and Crabb continue to run into the same people, however Dantès plans his re-run ins and Crabb just goes along bumping into familiar faces by chance.

Answer 1

yes

Answer 2

you lost me in between the second and third sentence.... are they the instructions or your essay? Your second sentence, taken all on its own, makes no sense and you need to rephrase it.

I suggest that you use a general statement up front: Introduce the characters and authors, and then complete that paragraph with the rst of your thesis statement.

Then go into what is the same, then what is different. Then discuss them, and summarize your original statement.

What you have written is typical of what passes for good writing in high school, but sure will not cut it in college. This is one of the weaknesses in secondary education these days: they use different standards than what is expected by a college........ not your fault of course, just the reality.

What you have can be edited into something quite good, so just keep plugging away at it!