Is this Trigee good?

Question

What do you think of my third attempt at a Trigee. It just came to me and have many meanings

Running blindly……Through the vinery

Grasping snakes……twisting widely

Open their jaws…….No where to hide

Releasing venom…..the reaper cries

Answer 1

Well Done !!!,,,,A little on the Dark side an enjoyable read just the same,,,Nice job

Answer 2

I'm not so up on the Trigee format....I like the steering force in the words though. And anytime the reaper cries...Bravo!!!

Answer 3

I like it a lot!

Answer 4

I like this style of poetry And this one has a chilling effect Yes ,yes it is

Answer 5

Excellent trigee. I just saw something on animal planet about snakes so this is cool!

Answer 6

No. And sometimes many meanings amounts to no more than no meaning. I'm not a fan of the 'scatter-gun' approach to poetry with its one style fits all as regards intention. Don't write unless you have something specific to say that's worth saying. Otherwise you're wasting your time and the readers. That's my last word on the matter.

Answer 7

I cringe at the thought of snakes and such, but you hit the mark with this.

One suggestion if I may? Consider changing widely to wildly?

Good job in my opinion!

*EDIT: Ma, Agreed. I just interpreted it differently. That's what makes poetry wonderful, each person's view.

Answer 8

A rather dark Trigee, but you nailed it!

Answer 9

O...K!

UM...IDK WUT 2 SAY!

[NOT SURE IF DATS A BAD OR A GOOD THING...KINDA STUCK IN DA MIDDLE!]

Answer 10

May I respectfully disagree with the suggestion above?

I took it that widely was referring to the opening of their jaws, if so, it should stay, as it's part of the imagery.

Normally, I'm not a HUGE fan of Trigee's, respect the craft of penning one (with awe, in fact), but usually don't enjoy the read.

This was was a fine exception for me.

ma

Answer 11

You've penned..............................An excellent Trigee

Verse rich in imagery.....................You are to be commended

Can you hear.................................The Reaper is crying

My applause................................... your poem lives!

Well crafted and enjoyable.

Answer 12

It is a Trigee, Kudos

Yet too dark for me.

Answer 13

I support anyone who tries to write poetry as it is a form of communication, promotes young and adult literacy and is a fun way to spend time. Sometimes the attempt is more important than the result. To try to capture a form and a feeling is a positive. To never try is the opposite. Well done Dragonlady for attempting a form that is difficult for a number of poets. A good read.