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Is this a good bio to show big model agencies?

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edited my bio and I think this is the right one could you just read it over and tell me what you think of it.

I don't know if this sounds to cocky if you think so ill take it out

I shake your hand I know I have the deal sealed because I have confidence in everything I do and I never put my head down.

My name is Tyler Phelan and I'm 18 years old. I was born in Livingston, NJ. I will be graduating Livingston High School this year with the world at my fingertips. I am willing to go after my goals in life and take on the impossible. After high school I'm looking to enter the computer or networking industry field. I would like to have modeling as a side job or even turn it into a career. I'm a good hard working student who always listens and completes tasks given to me from homework to chores. I'm very flexible at dealing with multiple tasks between school and work it's quite easy for me because I'm very good at doing two or three things at once. School does come first in my book, but if other opportunities open up I will do my best to complete everything thrown at me. That is who I am. I'm the kid who always takes on everything at once. I'm very much like your average eighteen year old teenager but not quite because I'm not the type of teenager that wastes their time sitting at home watching t.v. after school. Instead I like doing something with my life it doesn't matter what it is because I love to have fun. I have lots of friends, I play video games, and I enjoy going to the movies at twelve at night and seeing movie premiers. That is just an example of how outgoing I really am.

I feel I have what it takes to get into the business. I feel as though VIP Talent Connect, will help me as an individual to show agencies that I am more than just your average 18 year old . Although I'm just entering the modeling field I feel my personality will be my greatest attribute when it comes time to meeting with the people who can make your dreams come true. I'm confident and I'm a really nice guy so it's easy for me to make friends. I'm very good at presenting myself to others on first impressions. The minute I shake your hand I know I have the deal sealed because I have confidence in everything I do and I never put my head down. I've learned over the years to take responsibility for everything I do and to hold nothing back and to be who I am and to show the world who I am and I'm d**n proud of who I am. I'm not the type of person who impersonates others or steals people's ideas. I come up with my own ideas that best suit me and show people who I really.am I'm the kid who never wants to stop believing in his goals and to succeed in life and hopefully become successful in any endeavor I come across. Thank you for your time and I would appreciate any thoughts and opinions you have about me because I feel as it will only help me achieve my goals.

Tyler Phelan

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  1. I personally think that you need to reevaluate your bio.  Look to some other people that have written them and get a few more ideas, it tends to be a lot of I am and I do rather than just about what you have done and what you are doing now.

    Hope this helps.

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