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Is this a good cover letter??

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Dear Mr Barrie,

My name is ....... and I am writing to apply to ASMV Eastern Region Program. I am 15 years old and currently attending ...... Central School. As you may know ..... is a diverse mining community and as a result I’ve been fortunate enough to have had some experience working in the mining industry. I have attached my School Reports, TAFE Reports, Exam Marks and SRP (Science Assignment) Marks and as you can see I have been able to maintain excellent results which further displays my interest and commitment to the area of study.

The opportunity to gain first hand experience of the field by attending the ASMV Program would be invaluable to my future in the environmental sector as after completion of High School I would like to undertake a Bachelor of Science Majoring in Geology and Geosciences. The ASMV program particularly appeals to me as I see it as an way to explore diverse opportunities and environments and it would allow me to learn more about my areas of interest including Earth Sciences. I would particularly enjoy working with an organisation that shares my own ideals and concerns of environmental management.

During my schooling I have advanced my communication skills to a high level. This was evidenced in my position as a Student Representative Council Member of Lightning Ridge Central School. I have also participated in the School’s Debate Team and Public Speaking. Further evidence of my high level of communication skills is shown by the completion of a Certificate II in Community Services work through TAFE NSW and in particular the unit ‘Communicate with people accessing the services of the organisation’.

I would thoroughly appreciate the opportunity to take part in the ASMV Program and hope to hear from you in the near future.

Sincerely,

......

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  1. Is there a resume attached to this?  If so, I'd keep this cover letter much more succinct.  It's a little wordy.  Also, do a spell check.  I noticed that organization was misspelled twice.  

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