Is this a good love poem? Rate on scale 1-10?

Question

Embers

How do you spark a fire that won't ignite?

This is the love that I have for that one.

It's these glowing embers that warm my night.

They may be small, but their strength shames the sun.

If only I had just one match to strike

and even a little help from above,

maybe I could escape darknesses smite

and heat ourselves by igniting this love.

Oh how strong that eternal flame would be

that no wind could ever blow this love out

and by its light we shall forever see

the beauty it brought and left no doubt.

Yet, for now these embers will keep me warm.

Until wind no longer does make me mourn.

This is the first poem I've ever written.

Answer 1

their strength shames the sun

1st poem....your good

keep writing!  I'll watch for you and future poems    good luck!

I give this a 9 for sure

Answer 2

This is a good poem. It's really deep. If the person who the poem is for is a really down to Earth, romantic, and a sensative person, then they will really like it so I would give it like a 9. If this person is never serious, really dumb,  or doesnt know how to be romantic, I don't think they would appriciate it as much.

Answer 3

i really like it! i 'll give it an 8.5 or 9 out of 10

good job =)

Answer 4

7/10, it's good considering it's your first but a bit corny. Sweet though.

Answer 5

I give it  a 7 its good but could use a little more work as in word choice. but good

Answer 6

This is a good love poem!

Answer 7

DaaannnnnG!!!!

I Love it.

Go to my question plz.

I had asked about this yesterday.

Thumbs up.

HEY wtf.... who gave me thumbs down haugh??? Dang..

hehehe

9 1/2

Answer 8

pretty good----8

Answer 9

first poem ?>

wowowow you should be proud because it is amazing

i give it a 10 <3

Answer 10

aww yeah its very good i love it

Answer 11

wow.

that was really good, I give it a ten!

You should write more poems, this is really deep and written very well. I would love to get this love poem from a guy! haha :)

Answer 12

i think thats really good i give it an 8.75!! nice work for your first poem!!

Answer 13

I have never given a ten out to anything when ppl say to rate it but this is a 10. You've just inspired me! That was a beautiful piece of work. I don't believe in perfection but you've just showed me that some things are perfect! Don't change any of it!-Yahoo has some pretty crappy poet critics if they gave you a 6!!!!

Answer 14

A GIRL WILL LOVE THIS POEM

very good my friend.

Answer 15

It's very good, for a first poem.  My poetry isn't usually that deep.  By the way, in most poems, each new line begins with a capital letter, even if it's not the beginning of a sentence.  Good luck, and now you've started, keep going!  10/10 (for a first poem)

Answer 16

6/10

It's very thoughtful.. good to keep a theme running through.

It is a bit deep, but that is some people's thing.. I guess.. not for me though.

Good use of technique, rhyming throughout and rhyming couplet at the end.

In all honesty, the reason I gave this score is mainly due to the fact that none of the lines really jumped out at me. I like poems that have lines that make me think 'oh jesus I wish I thought of that! I'm gonna put it in my MSN name'. You usually find that songs which have good lyrics always do well.. example Rockstar by Nickelback. Despite it being cheesey.. everyone loves the lyrics and like putting them in their msn name, singing along to them etc.

Actually one line stood out 'They may be small, but their strength shames the sun'.

You need to try and make lines like this throughout the poem. Originality. At least one every stanza. There's nothing worse than having a poem with stanzas which you can just skim over and forget. Stanzas that repeat the same message.

Hope my criticism has been helpful :)

Good luck x Keep up the good work!

Answer 17

wow that was really good for someone's first poem! are u sure that u haven't written one before because that was beautiful?!

Answer 18

i think its beautiful, for a first you did great, i'll give it an 8.5. i hope who ever you wrote it for loves it. :), you need a little improvement on your choice of words. i love d lines "and by its light we shall see forever", and," they may be small but their strength shames the sun". keep practicing nd u'll be a great poet, dats if u want 2 be one.. lol

Answer 19

love it...romantic boy....scale you 10

Answer 20

i would rate it at a 9! this is really good for your first poem. i would try submitting it to some contest and you need to copy right this you dont want to end up seeing it in a book under someone elses name