Is this a good note to be sent? (would you please check this paragraph?)?

Question

I have written what I liked to say, I want it to a sincere note. I am sending it to my father's uncle's family and to the rest of the family who have forwarded their messages too. I didn't meet this great man by person as they are in uk and we don't live there. He was an old man.Would you please take a look at it and maybe replace some words or sentences with a better one?

If it is fine now also please let me know. So I would send it.

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We extend our deepest condolences to each one of you dears. That's a fact that some people's presence never ever leave this world and their love, positive energies, loving memories and pure celestial elements of their personalities live and remain immortally in everybody's hearts and souls.

The loving memories of such a pleasant person like uncle James will always be cherished by all means in our hearts and thoughts. We may not be so close to each other physically to share this difficult time with you, but we like you to know that you dears are always in our thoughts, hearts and prayers.

Answer 1

I think it sounds great! I wouldn't change a thing about it. It seemed to be sincere, honest, and heart-felt. That's ALL that matters!  :o)

Answer 2

soundspretty good to me

Answer 3

Beautifully written, very sincere, I think anyone would appreciate that note

Answer 4

We extend our deepest condolences to each and every one of you dearly. It is a fact that some people's presence never ever leave this world and that their love, positive energies, loving memories and pure celestial elements of their personality live and remain forever in our hearts and souls.

The loving memories of such a wonderful person like Uncle James will always be cherished deeply in our hearts and minds. We may not be closeby to share this difficult time with you, but we would like you to know that all of you are always in our thoughts, hearts and prayers.

Answer 5

When you write something like this to family, they want to know what's in your heart, not what grade you got in English composition.  If the note says what  you feel, it's perfect.  It's your way of sending them a hug, and you can't write a hug wrong.

Answer 6

Yes, send it.