Is this a good persuasion letter to disney and is there any thing I need to add or take away?

Question

Dear Disney,

Could you please get rid of HANNAH MONTANA because she has no talent at all? I am also a stockholder of your company. So could they hire me because I am really good at music and writing lyrics? HANNAH MONTANA has no talent at all like Paris Hilton so that is why I that is why you should hire me.

Answer 1

I like your persuasion letter !! You answered my question about how Me and my friend can get into Legally blonde without an Adult on Broadway. I was wondering how you know this? Because before I purchase our tickets I want to be sure. Thankss !!