Is this a good poem.? I wanna no what people think about my poems.

Question

An I Remember When

i know everyone's times comes.

the saying lifes the short is truer.

then people like to think.

its like just yesterday my life was filled with

friends gathered in my front yard,

playing silly little games like hide 'n go seek,

laughter could be heard from our street corner

love that you felt in your chest after your first kiss

& so much happiness

i took all those things for granted.

even thought they may seem small to others

they meant the world to me

now that its become the past

i wish i would have slown down

not rushed everything like i had.

i wish i would have took time

to enjoy the times i sent with those two

that i hold in my heart and miss dearly

we made a pact to be friends forever

life got in the way of our plan

but i no they still think of me

just as i still think of them

sometimes a wind breeze

or the smell of a new season will remind me

of those fun filled days i had with them

and ill think of the times we stayed out til 4

the times we played jokes on my grandfather

the long talks we shared

the truth n dares

there was never a dull moment with us was there

Death being so close like it is right now.

really makes you think

It makes you wanna slow everything down.

So you dont miss things as much when there gone.

just like everything else this to will soon become

Just a faded memory

the sadness will pass

fade out to just a story

of what had happened along time ago.

or an i remember when.

-Brittany

Answer 1

It's a little long...

but I thought it was rly good!!!

U should get it published!

Answer 2

its a really good poem ever think of getting it published? you should oh and also you should check out my friends poem on my profile i want to know what people think!

Answer 3

wonderful!!!!!!!

Answer 4

I like it, it explains something unusual, as i think of it.

its pretty long but yeahh its good.

iit has an emo twist to it lol

welll yeah i lovee it

(:

Answer 5

I like your poem a lot, and there are a couple reasons why. It's not rushed. Many poets rush the end of their poems, just to finish it, but you managed to lengthen it right. Also, the tone is and rhythm is smooth, so its nice to read. I really liked it, hope to see more poems by you on Yahoo Answers!