Is this a good poem for a 14 year odl writer?

Question

Its my first i wrote so well see i guess, and its not to anyone just a geberal poem.

Your beuty rises above the sight of a thousand roses gleaming in a golden light on a crsip spring morning

Your warmth resembles a sun kissed cheek that is and always will be pure happiness

Though i might never know for sure, my heart justifys these feelings and gives hope and a reason to beleive love exists

what you think suggestions? And i am a guy but im not g*y lol

Answer 1

First of all, if you're 14 and have a desire to write poetry, then you're more mature and in touch with your soul than most your age.  That being said, you need to understand that poetry is like painting...only you're using words to create images instead of colored oils.  So, if you painted a picture, but used the wrong colors, or failed to stay within the lines, then asked someone what they thought...well, they might not tell you the obvious things like "you didn't stay between the lines and you used the wrong colors"...but they'd miss the fact that you even "wanted" to paint!  So...when you write "odl" instead of "old", or "beuty" instead of "beauty", you're not staying inside the lines...but it's so easy to correct misspellings...just use your spellchecker, and if yours is broken, then use a dictionary.  It may seem picky, but imagine someone running into a theater and yelling, "you have to leave because the building is on fir!"...people would start laughing...and get burned up in the process.  This is what I'm talking about: distraction.  Yes, we know what words you "meant" to write, but when we stumble over a misspelled word, we stop reading for a second...and that takes us off the flow.  So...fix the spelling...it's easy to do and will pay dividends.  The good news is that although some may consider your images cliche, you're too young to have heard them enough for them to be cliche, so it means you probably thought them up yourself...so for you, they were not cliche...and they are some really good images.

So, seeing many, many poems written by others your age, I would say that although you need to work on your spelling, your image creation (which is very, very important in poetry) is better than average and I sense you have a kind heart.  Also, you don't need to tell us you're not g*y...just because you write poetry does not mean you're g*y...and those of us a bit older understand that...in fact, anyone on this part of YA knows that by default :)

Don't let my comments discourage you...in fact, I hope they "encourage" you to write more, because it's obvious you have desire...and it will help you become a better writer, and a better speaker...poetry does that to people...so keep writing.

Answer 2

It is really good for a beginner however poems need to make you think and wonder like What is he talking about and I think he is talking about this or it could be that. I think if you add a little mystery to it and other flashy stuff like rhyming and what not. People like wonder what is going on in your life to make you write something like this. Make it personal  

Answer 3

You have a great beginning. I've broken it into short lines -- they usually catch your readers imagination.

The first thing you do when you finish getting your poem ready for posting (or submitting to a publisher) is to run a spell checker. YA says there are 6 misspellings in the copy / paste of your poem.  You can see what you would have saved.  Also, never write a poem with the text spelling, it will always mark you as an amateur. Also capitalize I when used in a documetn, unless you wish to become another e.e.commings..

This has gorgeous imagery.

Your beAuty rises (Misspelled)

above the sight

of a thousand roses

gleaming in a

golden light on a

crISp spring morning <-- transposed

Your warmth resembles a sun kissed cheek

that is and always will be pure happiness

Though I might never

know for sure,

my heart justifys

these feelings

and gives hope

and a reason

to beleive

love exists.

It is a very good poem.

T.

{{{what you think suggestions?}}}

And i am a guy but im not g*y lol  -- I never thought you were a guy