Is this a good response to the college admission essay question?

Question

This is the question

"Write an essay which conveys to the reader a sense of who you are. Possible topics may include, but are not limited to, experiences which have shaped your life, the circumstances of your upbringing, your most meaningful intellectual achievement, the way you see the world - the people in it, events great and small, everyday life - or any personal theme which appeals to your imagination. Please remember that we are concerned not only with the substance of your prose but with your writing style as well. We prefer that you limit yourself to approximately 250-500 words (or 1-2 pages)"

I'm thinking of sending my personal mission statement. It states my goals and my morals. What do you think, is that a good response to this question. Also, it's 75 words over the range they give, is that any good?

Answer 1

It all depends on what your personal mission statement is.  Do not go over the 500 word limit.  Remember - check your grammer and SPELL CHECK!  Keep in mind that spell check doesn't always pick up errors.  For example, if you use the word "hear" (as in hearing a sound), but spell it "here", spell check won't pick it up.  Read it thoroughly and have someone else proofread it, too. You're submitting an essay for college and it needs to be grammatically correct with the appropriate punctuation.  One big mistake I notice people make - using "your" as in possessive, instead of "you're", the contraction for you are.  Don't make that mistake.  

Good Luck!

Answer 2

A mission statement is a wonderful way in which to communicate who you are.

Edit, edit, edit and bring your essay within the length limitation you are being asked to follow. The school wants a concise, intelligently constructed essay.

Even though the application states "We prefer..", that is actually code for "We will have to read hundreds of these. Please respect our time and the length limit so we know up front if you can follow directions. We will think better of you if you do so." I know of directors of admission who will ding an applicant if they don't follow length restrictions in an essay.

Seventy five words over isn't terrible, but try to bring it within what the school requests.

Don't over think it, let your authentic self shine and you should be fine.

Good luck

Answer 3

use figurative language, similies metephors to convey the reader to understand where you were or how you got to this point, and maybe whats in the near future. us luminous words, not any dull words. refrain from trying to use " I " more than 5 times. writing about your goals and such should do well.

Answer 4

A mission statement w/ goals isn't bad.  But it could be considered boring and kind of... bland.  It sounds to me like they're looking for a little more sustenance.  They really want to hear about something that shaped you as a person, how you think and feel about the world or hear something important that affected you in life.  A mission statement doesn't really do that.

I would go for a different approach.  Talk about an experience in your life that you overcame through dedication and how it has changed who you are today.  Maybe something important that happened as a child that you'll never forget?  Something that occured to you that shaped who you are.  That would probably be a little better and definitely more interesting.