Is this a good short story? I swear its not mine its my best friend and she wanted to no if it wuz good..?

Question

I woke up, just as I do every morning and went outside for some fresh air. The birds were singing and squirrels were scurring and all was well. Then everything went silent. I sat up in my chair and looked around and then saw it.. A coyote. This fierce beast had come from no where, and it stood there watching. As it stalked a nearby tree, where a squirrel was hiding, i quickly went inside relieved that nothing had gone wrong. As i looked at my agenda for the day, I saw all i had on it was church, and that wasnt till 12:00. I took a deep breath then poured my morning tea.

its not really a short story but an introduction for it. How was it?

Answer 1

I REALLY like it!!!it sounds really interesting! email it to me when shes done writing it!

Answer 2

The only thing i thought was interesting was "As it stalked a nearby tree" lol i like the word choice.

But yeah, too big of a deal over a coyote.

Not much happening. It needs purpose

Answer 3

Its okay.. good detal tho :)

Answer 4

uhh, ok. It kind made a big deal of the coyote thing. It was also way too fast, it didn't explain where the person was when they went outside, and i just didnt picture it. also, there were so many runon sentences and bad sentence structure. i personaly didn't really like it, plz don't be offended. If you worked on it you could make it a lot better.

yeah! sure! plz email it to me!! i love editing things, heheh

Answer 5

not doing it for me, needs literary classes or whatever, gets to the point to quickly, which isn't always too good

Answer 6

Pretty good but i could have sword you were going to go somewhere else with the Coyate part~