Is this a good thesis statement? The U.S. Virgin Islands is the most beautiful place on earth.?

Question

I'm doing a research paper on the U.S. Virgin Islands and I'm wondering if this sounds more like an opinion then a claim. I'm trying to make my paper sound good. If you have any suggestion I'm open to them. Thanks for taking the time to read this. Have a great day or night.

Answer 1

The Virgin Islands Daily News - A Pulitzer Prize Winning Newspaper

January 16th, 2008

        

      SPECIAL REPORT: Crime in Paradise

      Gun crimes, homicides put V.I. among most violent places to live in U.S.

      By JOSEPH TSIDULKO

      ANALYSIS

      Homicides in the Virgin Islands reached a record level in 2007, and gun

      crimes surged, despite a highly touted law enforcement initiative to take

      illegal firearms off the street.

      The territory's homicides rose above the record set just one year earlier,

      armed robberies spiked and shootings skyrocketed, according to statistics

      compiled by The Daily News. The original source for many of those reports

      was the Police Department's blotter, which is the department's unofficial

      record of all crimes reported to police.

      The violence particularly increased in St. Thomas, which surpassed St.

      Croix in most crime statistics for the first time in recent years. Before

      2007, the two islands had roughly the same number of homicides, armed

      robberies and shootings.

      There were indications near the close of 2007, however, that changes in

      police tactics and new task-force operations targeting high crime areas

      were proving successful.

      Those operations, which led to several arrests and the seizure of many

      illegal guns, were spurred by an initiative Gov. John deJongh Jr.

      announced in October to combat gun crime. The initiative focused on

      increasing cooperation between local and federal law enforcement agencies

      and was formalized in a memorandum of understanding between local and

      federal prosecutors.

      In compiling its statistics, The Daily News tallied every published report

      of homicides, armed robberies and serious shootings.



      Homicides and shootings

      Last year, of the 46 homicides in the Virgin Islands, 27 were on St.

      Thomas, 16 were on St. Croix and three were on St. John. One of those

      homicides was the result of a police shooting on St. John that was ruled

      justifiable.

      In 2006, there were 44 total homicides - 23 on St. Thomas and 21 on St.

      Croix - of which four were ruled justifiable, according to Daily News

      homicide statistics.

      The 2007 total means the territory remains one of the most violent places

      under the American flag.

      The Virgin Islands homicide rate per capita is 42 homicides for every

      100,000 residents. The national rate is 5.5 slayings per 100,000

      residents.

Answer 2

The Virin Islands are called "The Sailing Capitol of the world".

Then you can go into why it is the sailing capitol...

What makes people choose THAT place.

When I go to  St. Thomas I always see the larest boats in the world docked there. The people with the most money THERE. Why are they there and what is it they like so much about it. What is there to do on the islands and what to do in the waters.

Answer 3

Definitely an opinion. It's a hard thesis statement to support... especially with places like the Tahiti and the Maldives on the map.

BTW I grew up in St Thomas and I think it was AWESOME growing up there... but I know more places in the world now, so I couldn't make that claim.

Maybe something like.. "U.S. Virgin Islands... Island Paradise"?

Answer 4

While I'd incline to agree with you, I would say that sounds like opinion.  If you have enough data (e.g. polls, testimonials, awards) to support that claim then it's fine.

Answer 5

Wheter you decide to tag your thesis with a modifier of reason depends on the question you are trying to respond to. If the question asks, "What is the most beautiful place on earth?" your thesis would be totally valid, but if you are expected to provide details for you choice, then you should probably append your reason to it.

Theses need only be as specific as requirements dictate.

Answer 6

Try adding reasons WHY the US. VIrgin Islands is the most beautiful place on earth to your thesis.  Then prove it in your paper.  Is it due to the beautiful sea, the warm sands, the friendly people?  Thesises (thesii?) should be very specific.

Answer 7

no you shoudl tell why and state thre reasons so it is the most beautiful place on earth because________, __________, and ________.