Is this a good twilight book review so far?

Question

My favorite series is the twilight series. It is filled with comedy, romance and suspense these books will keep you turning pages and wanting more. Bella Swan an ordinary girl who has lived in Phoenix, Arizona all seventeen years of her life with her mother moves to live in the small and rainy town of Forks, Washington with her father, Charlie. Bella expects nothing but normal, but she is soon to be proved wrong. Bella makes plenty of friends her first day, but at lunch a mysterious boy named Edward Cullen keeps staring at her and it makes her feel uncomfortable. Edward sits with his 4 brothers and sisters at lunch everyday Emmet , Rosalie, Alice and Jasper who were all adopted into the family of Dr. Carlisle Cullen and his wife Esme, including Edward. In Bella’s next class, Biology, She is sent to sit in the only empty seat available next to Edward Cullen. Edward keeps a far distance away from Bella with a cold look on his face which upsets Bella greatly. She wonders what she did wrong to have him despise her so greatly when she walks into the office and he is there wanting to change out of the biology class and when he is denied he doesn’t show up to school for a week. When he returns he is extremely nice to Bella and they begin to spend time together. Bella finds she’s in love with him only to later discover he and his family are vampires and he craves her blood. Bella isn’t scared and they precede their in relationship. Every second spends with Edward is dangerous for her in many way then one. Everything goes fine until one night when Edward takes Bella along to watch him and his family play “thunder ball”. Half way a coven of wondering curious vampires named Laurent, James and Victoria come to meet the Cullen’s when they thought they heard vampires playing ball. When the Cullen’s realize James is a tracker and wants to kill Bella they set out to destroy James and save Bella's life. Bella is sent back to her hometown with Jasper and Alice to hide and stay safe, while Edward, Emmet and Carlisle try to find James and kill him. Both thee plans backfire when….

Answer 1

Whoa, it's supposed to be a review and not a recap of the whole book! You need to write about some of the storyline, but, a review should convey how you felt about the book (you should include some insight on how Stepehenie Meyer came up with the story).

Answer 2

i think its really good. And iagree, I love the whole twilight series and cant wait till the movie comes out november21!!!!! Back to the subject...i think you have a really good idea but to me its more of a summry than a review. In a review, you should go over how you like it and all that.  but there are a few grammer errors you might wanna go over unless thats just how you typed it in the question. But otherwise, its pretty good!

Answer 3

It's a mediocre review. You're telling the story fine but your opinion is so prevalent there. Try for a more objective standpoint. Also, try and keep SOME of the story in the dark. Maybe you can say something like, "but their relationship takes a downturn when .... etc etc"

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