Is this completely, ridiculously trite?

Question

"Lullaby Unsung"

I will dance you into sleep,

I will sing you through the night.

I will all your secrets keep,

and kiss you with morning light.

Night fading from black to white,

love for you runs river deep.

Rest in peace, I'll hold you tight,

Rest in peace, I've won the fight.

I will dance you into sleep.

Flames of love in heart ignite,

passion so strong that I weep,

stronger than the words I write.

I will dance you into sleep.

Answer 1

Only if completely, ridiculously trite means "Dang that's good!"

Answer 2

   Very beautiful, skillfully wrought and well thought-out. As to triteness, I'm not quite sure. It's rather predictable in that it is about love, sleeping, night, flames, etc.. Love is a rather over-used subject for poetry, but this is a wonderful example of a thrilling love poem.

Answer 3

not trite at all.

heaven safe night.

youd wake up right

or lucky die

in arms delight.

Answer 4

That's a beautiful lullaby. Great work.

Answer 5

I'm thinking candles, body lotion, dancing, and a good nap just before breakfast.

Answer 6

This has almost perfect meter and perfect rhyme. It does seem to dance.

I am a bit confused by the contrast of "Rest in peace," which usually refers to death, rather than to mere sleep and "Flames of love in heart ignite," as well as to references to passion and the "night fading from black to white," expressions which certainly indicate life.

However, the poem itself flows in beauty.

Answer 7

I disagree. This is neither incomplete nor contrite...

Answer 8

Reminds of, "I'll have the last waltz with you."

Nice way to fall to sleep, Kudos