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Is this good? Didn't hve room forlast line. Its.. This is a gift because now I can escape my life for real.

by Guest61895  |  earlier

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this poem is rather personal so if you done like it please don't be rude...

although I'm young

I have feelings too

feelings so deep

they cut into my skin

who knew something so painful,

could be the way out

of my broken heart and shattered dreams

I try to hide my pain with sleeves,

my way of escaping becomes a rumor

among the cruelness around me we call people

now my way of escaping becomes a stereotype

they call me a name I severly dislike

just thinking about the word and its meaning

makes me want to escape even more

my way of escaping differs from last time

it doesn't hurt because I'm so numb

I know what I'm doing but can't feel a thing

the numbness inside me freezes the surface

I see the blood run but don't know what I've done

the blood keeps coming,

why didn't it stop?

I start to feel dizzy and realize what I've done

I fall over weak and no longer numb

I lay, knowing what's happening and trying to think

of what I'm being punished for

but then I realize

that this is no punishment

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  1. I really wish the world wasn't so cruel as to make people this way (me too, me too). You should try using synonyms for escape (or escaping).

    Read my poem?

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