Is this good? i wrote it?

Question

It was Strange to her; so madly strange. She had never needed anything before, except for the essentials (food, water, clothes). But she needed this. It was the most alien type of need she had ever experienced. It was a need that she could technically survive without, but life would be nothing but a blank page without its presence. This was the kind of need that made her heart beat with passionate eagerness, made her soul crave, and made her mind quarrel with frustration of indecisiveness. She had also come to realize that this was not just a need, it was a desire; a desire strong enough to move mountains. It was like nothing she had ever felt before, something far beyond what she ever imagined love could be. She knew the basic definition of love. It meant to care for or have a strong liking for some person, place or thing. She cared about her parents, and her friends. She supposed she loved them, but she didn’t need them. It was a difference that only took one word to describe, yet, it was so much larger than that. She needed this, and she needed him.

Answer 1

that was really good!

Answer 2

Hmmm.  Depends on your audience.  For me - no.  But other people might like to read this.  Everyone has their own take on how to describe love.  I am not sure how I would even describe it.  I like your effort though.

Answer 3

I like your description.

Answer 4

r u going to write a book? cuz thts good

Answer 5

it was good.

a wee bit vague and a little choppy.

I would work on the flow of your paragraph structure, but otherwise, good start!

Answer 6

Wooo!

Answer 7

I like it. It's real good!!!

Answer 8

Thats really good. Now i wanna read more. Wish i could wright like that.

Answer 9

I fell asleep at line 3 for what I think was a couple of hours. Anyways, after I woke up I finished it. It is a good start.

Answer 10

yeah thats really good.  natural talent.  its annoying when ppl write w/o it.  uhh, i dont think ur uses of ";" is right.  u could jsust use commas there, or is u want like "-"

Answer 11

yeah I like that. I wish I could write as good. lol Keep up the good work. :)

Answer 12

awww i like it :) so romantic :)

Answer 13

WOW...when your novel comes out, please do let me know.

Answer 14

ya its very deep and i love it. choose me as a best answer

Answer 15

will you quit chasing me?  lol It was ok.

Answer 16

(sniff sniff) that was beautiful, holy freak i need a tissue!! u got talent although the not needing her family... well she coul... lets face it there were no down sides i have to read it again.. publish it i lllllllooooooovvvvveeeee iiiittttt:):):):):) 5 stars***** 5 stars *****

Answer 17

You wrote that about me, didn't you?

Answer 18

inner conflict?

Answer 19

its very good...If its a story i want to read the rest! but if it's a poem try it slightly less wordy/descriptive...try removing "buts", "ands", and "it was" etc for more intensity...

Answer 20

that is really good. it draws the reader in. it gives good incite into the characters thoughts and feelings. a good mental description of her.  this could be developed into a very inticing story

Answer 21

It' good, but a bit redundant feeling.