Is this good or bad rate 1-10 i need tips?

Question

HEY, HEY, HEY I’M BACK THE DAY

MAKE THE LADY’S SAY ‘‘A’’

SMOKIN ON THAT HAY

I WENT TO THE STORE TO PICK UP SOME OHH

AND I BOUGHT SOME CHICKEN TO START THAT LICKEN

AND MY GIRLFRIEND CAME IN LOOKIN VERY THIN

I THOUGHT SHE HAD A TWIN

THE WAY SHE HAD THAT GRIN

AND I GAVE HER KISS AND IT TASTED LIKE SWISS

AND LET IT BE LIKE THAT

LET ME TAKE U TO THE BED

AND, BRAKE THE BEDSPREAD

AND THE REST IS UNSAID IF U TALK ABOUT IT

BEST-BELEASE U DIED LIKE BRITTANY AND K-FED

Answer 1

1/10

Answer 2

is it lyrics for a song? does it have to be about s*x? no offense but, i'd rate it at 2 - at least for your effort. :)

Answer 3

Can we go lower than 1?

Answer 4

I would like rate as 3 over 10.Sorry about that,but I have to say that your poetry is disapproving,it makes me feel that it cannot be suited as a good poetry.Probably,you can write a more deep impression than this.This seems like it is 's*x'.You mention a lot of things about it.Don't mention that too much for people will have no intent to read.

Answer 5

ummm.. that was sort of a rap, and i cant really rate raps, but they are totlly different than poetry.

but ill give yu a 5

Answer 6

sorry im gunna give it a 3

not everything has to ryme

and it kinda sounds like alot of rap songs ive heard mixed together

try come up with something original

u have potental

i thnk if u were a bit more original and didnt try to ryme ever line that u could make a very good poem

good luck i hope ive helped:)