Is this haiku a welcomed relief?

Question

from one who tends to use too many words?

My Laptop

Minds intertwining

offer wisdom touching hearts

treasure chest of wealth

Answer 1

I like it!  My 9 year old niece once wrote this one that sticks with me.

Summertime is here.

The weather is getting hot.

My cat licks her fur.

cute!

Answer 2

You have used exactly the right number of words, and more importantly the right words.  Wonderful.

Answer 3

Very nice with true written all over it. Well done.

Answer 4

I knew I would learn something today!

Answer 5

It is a lovely statement. If it isn't about nature, in Japanese it is called a Senryu. If it is in English, we call it an Ameri-ku (creative new terminology), because we can't really render this form into English.You have nonetheless written something beautiful and wise.

Answer 6

Oh ma, you've done it again now haven't you. We touch so many hearts here. I know I've never felt so alive as I do when I get to visit my friends. You all can never really replace my real family, but you're my extended family and I luvs ya all. I have comfort when I hurt, friendship when I need it, advice when I don't know what to do. You may not know it, but you are my friends. I don't bother with anyone around me. All stupid hillbillies. That's a whole other subject.  LOL

Answer 7

"Squish squash, sling that slang!

I'm always right back at ya;

Like... my BOOMERANG!!"

"That's right, I'm Sokka!

It's pronounced with an 'okka'!

Young ladies... I rocked ya!"

Bouncer-looking guy: That's too many syllables, bub. *Throws him out*

- Sorry, I just HAD to quote that hilarious "haiku" from Avatar. =)

Anyway, when haikus come from me they're never a relief; for I write at least 10 of them in Haiku form to create one poem. =)