Is this letter right please helppp!!?

Question

I wrote this letter to a friend telling her that i had applied for a job the thing is that i dont know if it is good english coz i must give it to my english teacher today

please help meee

Dear Erika,

Hi how is it going? Im fine. Last week I applied for a job as advertised in the newspaper.

I explained all my qualifications and I have almost all of the things which are required. I quite fancy having that job. Because it is what i have been looking for since a long time you know. As Im not bad at all to deal with foreign people.That job looks just right for me I hope I get picked!

I must stop now I have to go

See You soon

Valentina

Answer 1

Dear Erika,

Hi, how is it going? I am fine. Last week I applied for a job that was advertised in a newspaper. (Maybe put the Paper name and make the introduction a bit longer)

I explained all my qualifications and I have almost all of the necessary requirements. I would fancy having that job; it is what I have been looking for a long time. I am easily able to deal with foreign people, which is what the job entails. This job looks just right for me. I hope I get picked!

I must stop now I have to go (Try to make a little more personal)

See you soon,

Valentina

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Answer 2

Dear Erika,

Hi, how are you? I'm fine.

Last week I applied for a job that was advertised in the newspaper.

I explained all my qualifications and I have almost all of the things which are required. I quite fancy having that job, because it is what I have been looking for, for a long time - as I'm not bad at dealing with foreign people.

The job looks just right for me - I hope I get picked!

See you soon,

Valentina

sounds a little more appropriate

hope this helps :)

Answer 3

leave out "because it is what"sentence. put in that space "I have been looking for something like this for a long time, as you know." next sentence change to "This job looks just right for me, since I deal with foreign people well."  next sentence just say "I hope I get the job."   the rest of it looks ok. Oh yeah, change to "job that was advertised" .... good luck.

Answer 4

Not bad - here is a suggested way of changing it to something a little more formal and less like you are talking on the telephone.

Dear Erika,

Hi, how are you doing? I am fine. Last week I applied for a job I saw advertised in the newspaper.

I explained all my qualifications and I almost have all of the things which are required. I quite fancy having that job because it is what I have been looking for a long time. I work well with foreigner people and that job looks just right for me. I hope I get selected!

I must stop now as I have to go (add where you are going - to bed, to school, etc.).

See you soon,

Valentina