Is this poem cheesy ?

Question

is this poem cheesy for a 13 year old girl to write

He caught my eye

He caught my eye,

I cant deny.

When I saw him there,

He was almost to glorious to bear.

His smile so bright,

His eyes golden and light.

Oh, the sight, the sound, the thought of him.

I can’t, I wont, say that I love him.

The only thing that I wont deny

Is that he caught my eye.

Answer 1

I assume that you want an honest answer.  I think that that poem is a little cheesy.

Answer 2

It is beginning poet typical fare. TOO before glorious. So how is junior high going?

Answer 3

no i like it  

Answer 4

a little, but that's love! lol, It's cute, and it perfectly desribes teen love.

mine?

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Answer 5

i love it! it's a bit cheesy, but it's okay!

i like it!

Answer 6

I like it

freshly in love?

Awh, it's adorable

Answer mine if you can please =]

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and yes it is is a tiny bit cheesy?

But what's wrong with that? At least it's not depressing like all my poems.

Answer 7

h**l yes

Answer 8

Well, I have to be honest. It is cheesy. But, I personally think your rhyme scheme is pretty effective, so you do have potential.  Plus, unlike other poems similar to this, I liked  how you stated that you knew it wasn't love-unlike other very young poets who expresses in their poems that their infatuation is love.:]

Answer 9

   Almost cheesecake...but hey I love cheesecake.  

Answer 10

I like this very much - it is bright and cheerful - with a sunny approach. I like your visuals of brightness. The last line was exquisite. Well done. Keep up the good work. ♥

Answer 11

it's alright, but the rhyming is distracting.