Is this poem good, rate it please

Question

Night

Every night I went to sleep

I had a dream of which I think.

Standing near the altar

With friends surrounding me.

But as I pray

Something dint feel right

Shadows and darkness were coming in.

Warnings came but we dint listen

Until we saw the real thing,

The dream was turning into something else

Slow it was but it was coming straight

And every night it got worse and worse until it became real.

Shadows surrounding us

Darkness taking us

And we saw what they can do to us.

I lost faith on the one I believed

While I saw life’s being taken of the ones I live with

Some hope came,

But it dint last forever.

One night when I was severely injured

A light came in the window

Waves of sand coming in through them

And I knew I was free.

Now it’s just a memory

But before that it was a dream,

A dream that started on the night…….

Answer 1

It doesn't flow too much. Sorry.

Answer 2

It's not good. The story is, but you lack rhyme and meter. Your misspelling some words doesn't help.

This is just one man's opinion, and I don't especialy care for poetry, except in songs that have rhyme and meter

Answer 3

10/10 for sure! Thats great- keep em coming!

Answer 4

Thattz really good but kinda hard to understand

Answer 5

I think the guy above me got it in one :D

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Answer 6

There isn't a single poetic use of language from beginning to end.  It's prose with chopped up lines.  Stick to prose.

Answer 7

yeah i think it's awesome! i love how you had hope in the end and how you expressed yourself.