Is this poem good considering i am 15 years old??? Please answer??

Question

The World Is Beautiful

The innocent laughter of a child

A summer breeze so cool and mild

The coolness of the rain against my face

A dove as it soars across the sky with grace

A forest so full of life and wonder

The power of a lion as it roars like thunder

The feeling of new love in spring

The natural beauty of stone, not cut for a ring

The purity of untouched snow on the ground

Birds singing at dawn, natures perfect sound

There's so much beauty in the world, my eyes can barely stand to see it.

And even when darkness falls, there's still so much light beneath it

My heart, it just wants to take it all in

But the darkness, it creates a wall and so my heart cannot win

Despite the blinding light which never stops shining, the darkness can make it so hard to see

And so i must fight to see the world's beauty, and to see the beauty that lies within me

Answer 1

Very good flow, you should try to publish that in a contest or anthology. Great job!

Answer 2

for 15 it's great.Writers block is more like being disinterested in a particular way of writing. try writing about,school,malls,mud holes,roads,colors,and so on

          peace

Answer 3

That's nice for a fifteen year old!

Answer 4

Beautiful thoughts and images presented here.

Great potential for a 15 year old!

Answer 5

A World of Beauty:

In case you were looking for a title.

The world has so much to offer

there is much beauty

and the history

The world has all kinds of weather

and the seasons.

The most beautiful thing is nature

Another beauty is seeing a child smile

It has beautiful sunrises

and sunsets, stars, moon

People go away to the lake to see nature

and for the peace and quiet.

Answer 6

it is nice especially for a 15 year old person

Answer 7

Leave the first verse, it could have been written by anyone, and is full of the most common images. Too many cliches and fumbling for rhymes that fit at the expense of meaning. Its like an advert.

BUT the second verse is fine, true and striking. Very strong and your own voice. I'm paying you the compliment of being critical as I would to an adult because you have something good there.

I hope you can follow what I am saying, because you have a poets voice when you let it go!