Is this poem good? i just wrote it?

Question

isnt it strange how we used to be lovers

now we cant even stand to look at eachother

we used to talk about how we'd get married

but its like now you just want me buried

everyone knows me and you were so right

so how could we juss fight all d**n night

knowing that both our hearts would be broke

now all you really wants for me to choke

Answer 1

wow i love it.

it's perfect.

i think it took a long time to write that poem.

thanks for your nice poem.

Answer 2

Yup it rings true! Well done. Keep the raw edge, I like it...

Answer 3

It's clever and humorous.  Really quite a chuckle.

But it would carry more weight, be accepted by serious poets, if you used a spell checker and apostrophes, such as isn't.

T.

Answer 4

lol

it's really nice!

I love this part :D

we used to talk about how we'd get married

but its like now you just want me buried

hahaha

Answer 5

needs some help...but a good starting point.

Answer 6

I like it, funny BUT change the last sentence to something like.... Now all you want is for me to choke. Good luck on your poems, I write them when I am bored...sometimes.