Is this poem good?

Question

goodbye

im leaving you

alone

today im going

away

ill forget your

words

ill forget your

song

you hurt my wings

im unable to

fly

im leaving you

goodbye

Answer 1

I really like the line breaks and rhythm, some interesting imagery could make it better though

Answer 2

not bad

Answer 3

A fine farewell and a good poem .

:0)

Answer 4

It sounds good.

Answer 5

It's not bad. You've got some interesting line breaks. You may want to emphasize them a little more to get those dual meanings between the lines. For example:

im leaving

you alone

today im going

away

ill forget

your words

ill forget

your song

you hurt my wings

im unable to

fly

im leaving you

goodbye

Answer 6

It's good! =)

Answer 7

Good work! This is a bit disturbing because of the content, add a memory or two and brighten it up.