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Is this poem i wrote for my gf good?

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Ive stolen countless breaths

from this world i am living in

this journey I'm on

i did not consent too

and i have not embraced

or even bothered to taste

the sweet aroma of meaning

i stumbled upon you accidentally

i was not in search of you

i was in search of me

but everything changed

when i looked into your eyes

elusive and transparent

i could see the depths of your heart

and for a split second

i forgot to breath

and at the same time as yours

my heart skipped a beat

your beauty was overwhelming

instantaneous love out of a dream

an angel had lifted me off of my feet

words don't do justice to the beauty i saw

her beauty and grace left my heart in awe

her lips were soft and her voice was sweet

her fingers trembled when they first touched me

our eyes met and i heard her speak

i listened to her and my heart began to weep

god gave me what i was praying for

in the chamber of life you unlocked the door

today was the day i was waiting for

my search for meaning in life was no more

Trevor

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  1. it is sweet because it has meaning and it shows you care  


  2. Its a wonderful poem

    i think you gf will enjoy it!!

    You should keep writng

    Hope I helped

    - ♥ Taylor ♥

  3. yes trevor it would mean the world to her,she will never forget how you spoke those words to her,its special have you given her it,nice one,it shows you have a heart,aswell as a brain.,peAce.

  4. I think that is a beautiful poem, and I like the fact that most of it doesn't rhyme...

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