Is this poem i wrote for my gf goood?

Question

Ive stolen countless breaths

from this world i am living in

this journey I'm on

i did not consent too

and i have not embraced

or even bothered to taste

the sweet aroma of meaning

i stumbled upon you accidentally

i was not in search of you

i was in search of me

but everything changed

when i looked into your eyes

elusive and transparent

i could see the depths of your heart

and for a split second

i forgot to breath

and at the same time as yours

my heart skipped a beat

your beauty was overwhelming

instantaneous love out of a dream

an angel had lifted me off of my feet

words don't do justice to the beauty i saw

her beauty and grace left my heart in awe

her lips were soft and her voice was sweet

her fingers trembled when they first touched me

our eyes met and i heard her speak

i listened to her and my heart began to wept

god gave me what i was praying for

in the chamber of life you unlocked the door

today was the day i was waiting for

my search for meaning in life was no more

Trevor

Answer 1

oh my!

thatss completely amazing(:

no joke, if i were her i would be the happiest girl ever.

i would love if someone wrote me thattt.

she would love it(:

good luck!

Answer 2

You would seriously regret NOT giving that to her. Trust me :]

What a wonderful job.  

Answer 3

wow, any girl who got a poem like that from her bf would be one of the luckiest girls in the world! That was very sweet and she'll love it. People always say things are too corny, but really deep down they like the gushy attention. One thing though, not to correct you or anything, but 5 lines from the bottom maybe you want to put weep instead of wept. ; )

Answer 4

well i think its kinda boring .

buh what matter is what ur gf think of it .

Answer 5

wow this is really really good man! this is the sweetest thing a guy could do for a girl, and with out being cheesy, because i could tell these were your true emotions and it showed, she will love this poem no doubt,

good on you man!

Answer 6

no

Answer 7

lol words cant win sum1's heart even playboys say some good poems and win girls hearts...those girls are crazy... becoz they think they are romantic but whatever they say in their poem they'll never actually do that or had heppaned to them like

- i can die for you but when their GF say die...they won't...

poems are meaningless stop wasting ur time boy...