Is this poem ok?

Question

I am the girl for you

Theres nothing left to say

Theres nothing else to do

Didnt the angels comferm

I am the girl for you

Ill never let you down

Ill always treat you right

The love I Have is true

Yes I am the girl for you

And when your upset and hurt

Just think of me first

Because I Dont makeyou blue

You See I Am the girl for you

So now you get my threoy

I Tried to explin It Cleary

So Whatever you may do

Just Understand I Am the girl for you

Answer 1

So now he must get that you are the girl for him! :-)

I find it original and very nice. It flows, which is also good. I prefer poems that flow to those which do not.

Final answer to your question: Yes, it is OK.

Answer 2

I like the poem. The thought and flow is nice. I can't help wonder about the texting language. In a few hundred years will our "proper" language be viewed as we view "Old English"?

Answer 3

lovely, good job :)

the rhyme pattern seems different every four lines, but this is nice.

Answer 4

The poem has a delightful flow and message, but you need to use proper grammar.  The use of IM and text is destroying the English language.  Use a spell checker too.

These two things will make your poetry better and more professional.  You have the magic of a muse -- now learn the language of your words.

Use punctuation.   Ill -- that could be 3 in Roman Numerals, or a word for sickness (ill); I'll is the correct form.  Please use the contractions -- It will always make your poetry stronger.  The IM lingo doesn't belong in a poem.  

Theres nothing left to say <--- There's  (there is)

Theres nothing else to do<--- There's

Didnt the angels comferm<--- didn't

I am the girl for you

Ill never let you down <-- I'll

Ill always treat you right  <-- I'll

The love I Have is true (punctuation within the line ???

Yes I am the girl for you

And when your upset and hurt (your = you're - you are)

Just think of me first

Because I Dont makeyou blue <-- don't- makeyou? make you

You See I Am the girl for you <--

So now you get my threoy

I Tried to explin It Cleary <-- explain not explin

So Whatever you may do

Just Understand I Am the girl for you.

T.