Is this poetic or cliched?

Question

This is not a full poem just a few lines a threw together when I was half asleep.

This feeling inside i small

But it creeps

From my mind to my chest

Where my dormant heart sleeps

The jolt, the spark

The meeting of eyes

But still I fear

For it may bring my hearts demise.

Think what you may, I don't know why I wrote this. Also, don't feel like you'll offend me by saying it's shet. I only believe honest opinions.

Answer 1

I really liked it. Just don't ever take it to poetry.com they are a scam!

Answer 2

Well, being completely honest, I didn't understand it. Also I love poems with fancy language that just rolls of your tongue and unfortunatly that was where you failed.

Answer 3

the lines are good but the difference between good poetry and c**p is whether it had meaning or not.  If you just made up these lines because it sounds poetic but makes no sense, then its sort of stupid.  But if you actually know what "the feeling" that you are talking about is, if the poem actually has a purpose, then its rly good.  There has to be a reason why this "feeling" is going to bring ur heart's demise, even if you dont exactly explain the reason.