I am still not sure on the Iambic pentameter, Am I getting closer?
Does it still need a brush up?
And how can I improve it?
Here is the link from the one I had up yesterday so you can see the changes I have made.
http://au.answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AtgCKvLKiW.xpC_pgMDv4IPg5gt.;_ylv=3?qid=20080728115520AA76P8H
Sonnet
A Sonnet is a poem consisting of 14 lines (iambic pentameter) with a particular rhyming scheme:
rhyming scheme:
Ab ab cdcd efef gg.
11 syllables.
Enfold God sits upon his petal seat throne,
Praise vast beauty sowed monotonously by hand,
Glistening crystal blue Sapphire Jewel sewn,
Swiftly caress against golden soft buff sand,
Enveloping great mega coliseum,
Luminous sun reflecting God’s graceful glee,
Gastly Wind orchestrates earth’s athenaeum,
This beautiful Glia which captivates me,
Autumn leaves percussion, bee’s dance upon hives,
Bird sing songs whilst humming birds sing their hymns,
Drum beats roll across charcoaled sleekest black eyes,
Seasons do inspire nature’s creative whim,
Subtle harmonious tunes played by nature,
Twirling atoms dances to earths denature.
Coliseum has 4 syllables
Athenaeum has 4 syllables.
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