Is this sentence punctuated properly?

Question

The sentence is...

We become part of that flow when we let our ego take a back seat to our magnificence, when we quit playing small and instead say yes to possibility.

Please make changes, additions - whatever - but explain them by referencing grammar rules.

Thanks!

Answer 1

We become part of that flow when we let our ego take a back seat to our magnificence; when we quit playing small and instead say yes to possibility.

I think you need a semicolon.

Answer 2

We become part of that flow when we let our ego take a back seat to our magnificence, when we quit playing small and instead say "yes" to possibility.

Leave the comma where you have it.  A semi-colon won't work here because the part after the semi-colon is a dependent clause.  However, I would put quotation marks around "yes."

Answer 3

Apostrophes and more commas should be used, for the sentence to read smoothly, thus:

We become part of that flow when we let our ego take a back seat to our magnificence, when we quit playing small, and instead, say 'yes' to possibility.