Is this the first day of the best of your life?

Question

No Intent....Pt. 1

In the midst of society

Everyone trying to be free

It’s available for you and me

Yet there are those too blind to see

It’s all so clear in your face

You just can’t find your own space

Wishing you were in another place

Go under cover mix with the race

Step off the edge try to stop time

Turn the page see what you find

It’s all rapped up in the rhyme

Or maybe it’s all just in your mind

Never making it to the top ten

The mirror can never be your friend

Evil thoughts on the verge of sin

Cross your heart and do it again

Looking for that inner peace

Load your head feel the release

Falling through a hollow crease

Never knowing west from east

Leave the train at the station

Break free create a new relation

Make your own right situation

Forget about the devastation

Tilt your head up to the sun

Know you’re not the only one

It ain’t over until it’s done

Turn yourself to number one

Answer 1

A lot of words conveyed with the summation being get off your duff, be yourself and stand tall?  There is a nice flow to your words, not forced as in a lot of rhymed poems.

Answer 2

This is beautiful with such a depth of meaning.  I love the lines

"Tilt your head up to the sun

Know you're not the only one

It ain't over til it's done

Turn yourself to number one"

That is wonderful and compassionate advice. If everyone heeded this advice, the world would be a more enlightened place.  I do appreciate it.  Thank you.

Answer 3

great! A day at a time, that any one can handle, if not a

moment will do, and your poem is a moments start.

I like it, full of energy.