Is this thesis good?

Question

Claudio Monteverdi modernized the musical world through transitioning to the baroque style.

Answer 1

Yes, very. It is clear and well put.

Answer 2

the thesis is good and clear to the point  turst me i get a's****.amp;#039;s on my essays i write

Answer 3

i don't think that's grammatically correct,

"monteverdi's music was revolutionary as it marked the transition between the renaissance and baroque periods"