Is this too clingy or too anything?

Question

Emancipation

Must I keep my love inside me?

Must I shroud my love in quiet?

Must I hide it never yield it?

Can I never truly show you?

My deepest depth of understanding

Can I not reveal exactly

Every once of caring in me

Must I be content to be yours nearly?

Never to be had completely

Must I give myself while fearing?

That you’ve heard my secret cheering

Dark has heard my sighing, crying

Tears of love and tender passion

Cries and sighs of much affection

Quiet pride and great devotion

Darkness knows my heart is breaking

Never to sense your glad receiving

Nor to see your joy in having

All my love, though quite imperfect

Must I love you dear in secret? ~ patsy mcAuley

Answer 1

It is very tender and would shine best with more editing to improve meter.  You could even try to set up the lines to accentuate more like:

Must I...

    keep my love inside

    a shroud of quietness

    hidden, never yielded

I like, spend some more time on, it is worth the effort.

Edit:  Is not this more free form where meter count helps but is not needed?  I would more stay with free form for this.  Just spend time speaking the words to hear places that sound choppy.  You can also then eliminate a lot of words not needed.  Just my thoughts, so take them for what they are worth.

Answer 2

a little bit but it's still really good

Answer 3

excellent

Answer 4

I think this is a poem of great passion and deep feeling,

It takes courage to let feelings such as this pour out of heart

to flood others, Not at all "too" of any thing Neg.

Kudos.