Isn't this a sad but really good poem?

Question

It's called: "Where?"

I sit and stare, and I ask God where,

Where did I catch this cold?

this cold feeling that makes my thoughts

twist into something

Something that lingers in my head,

burrows itself

Turning me into someone I’m not

Planning and crying, this thought

makes me wonder where,

where did they go?

The happy feelings, the smile

that use to be painted

always painted on my face

This cold makes me see reality

no longer are my thoughts clouded,

no longer am I protected

protected by my outer shell

that shows the girl that always smiles

always laughs and never cries

she seems like she’s happy

always, always she is smiling

Asking and more planning,

trying to sleep face down

fear that no one will understand

this cold makes me feel

alone and unwanted

fearing the judgment that

my body will endure

my conscious tells me no

but the cold lingering thought it

makes me search for a way out

Pills and pillows, this thought

it makes me want to sleep

sleep and wake up

wake up where I can ask God

ask Him face to face,

Where did I caught this cold?

Answer 1

Look, you want honesty right?

Well well, you have asked the right person. If you were the author of this poem I would have to admit brutally, it really really sucks.

Please accept my truth as respect....

Yours truly

Brittney

Answer 2

It's beautiful.

Answer 3

yeah

its too direct

poems are supposed to be metaphorical

theres a bunch of errors

where did i caught this cold?

what the h**l????

Where did I catch this cold?

ok

its not too sad, it sounds like whoever wrote it doesn't feel what it means. Just constructive criticism

Answer 4

For me, I don't mean to be rude, but I don't like it. Right things that people want to hear. They don't wanna hear sad stories. And catching a cold? I would be more inspired by the flu. Write a happy poem, ones which people will read. To me, it isn't what I like to read. I read it, because I just wanted to give you this tip. I didn't even read the whole thing! Not trying to be mean or rude, but it is true.  

Answer 5

that's a really good poem

Answer 6

i love it. its very very good.