It just rained, so I wrote a poem, What do you think??

Question

The blur of rain falls so violently

Yet awakes no one sleeping silently

The sun hides out of fear

To wait until the sky’s are clear

Darkness shades over the day

Turns the storming sky to grey

The sun is still no where in sight

The darkened sky then turns to night

The sky now angry begins to yell

Releasing forth his magic spell

Bolts of fire leave the sky

Unleash another horrid cry

The trees now dancing in the wind

Flow so hard to when their skinned

The sun learned to concur his fright

Decides to shed a little light.

Answer 1

I think it is beautiful. It was very well written.

You're good with words.

Keep writing!

Answer 2

that's really good!!!

i like it

Answer 3

That sounds AMAZING!  It flows really nicely.  

Answer 4

Wow! I really like it! I like the metaphors, the verbs, and the adjectives you used! It's really quite lovely.

Answer 5

it's okay.

Answer 6

FANTASTIC.  YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE AND MAYE MAKE A BILLION DOLLARS.

Answer 7

Well done you must be good at english lit. very good!

Answer 8

This poem is awesomely written

I like how you described each line

the first line for example talks about a

down pour of rain.

Those stormy clouds can and are an

indicator. Along with the thunder and lightning

another sign.

The thunder and lightning can be frightening

to someone

The lightning can be bolts

during the rain weather

the winds can be damaging.