Ive done a economics piece of writing about Microsoft and Yahoo and was wodering if i ocudl get some feedback?

Question

Im in Year 10, GCSE first year and the link is jst here - http://www.badongo.com/file/10045734 - all feedback, good or bad would be greatly appreciated!

Thanks

Answer 1

Is linking to file sharing allowed?

Answer 2

why didnt you write an introduction?? because i didnt know why you were writing about those 2 companies. And im sorry to say this, but i think is badly written, try to make it look professional. What about showing it to your teacher before you finally hand in the work and then get some feedback? i think the information is not that bad but you have to put the info in a better way. Good luck