Judge my poem truthfully?

Question

Would you remember me if i were gone?

would you remember all ive done?

Would you remember me if i die?

Even though this lifes a lie

Would you miss me if i fade?

Would you miss the times we played?

Would you miss me, for goodness sake?

Even though i was a fake

Would my memorie live after death?

Would my memorie live of the wrath?

Would my memorie be a big deal?

Even though I wasn't real

I wasnt real, I wasnt true

I was a fake, untrue to you

So would you remember me, would you miss me, would my memorie live on?

Would you remember me, would you miss me, even though i was a fraud.

Its called Would you remember me.

DId i spell Memorie right?

Answer 1

it was excellent. and no memory is spelled memory

Answer 2

Hi!

i like it very much because these are the question i often use to ask my husband.

the spelling is memories or memory

Answer 3

Its really good, but I think you should change it a bit and not ask to many questions.

Your rhyming is good though.

Answer 4

its kinda repeatative..

same would you

but other then that it was goood

Answer 5

It's spelled "memory."  

I didn't really like it... Maybe I just have a problem with so many rhetorical questions. ^^;;

My favorite part was:

"I wasnt real, I wasnt true

I was a fake, untrue to you"

It flowed much more smoothly than the rest, and it's simplicity stood out as honest rather than simplistic.  

You need to work on the grammar.  Things like missing apostrophes and capitols, mostly.

The sentence "Would my memorie live of the wrath" doesn't make sense.  Maybe you could change it to something like "Would my memory live on in wrath?"