Judge this Poem as if this were Poetic idol or something?

Question

A story so real that we can all feel

Filled with worries, sadness, and lies

A story of happiness, anger and fear

That were all forced to call life

You dont decide who your parents would be

Or the people you meet along lifes path

But ofcourse you can pick your own destiny

But the end either way is death

With diffrent begginings, middles, and ends

With diffrent parents, customs, and friends

With people, places, and beliefs to defend

Yet, through it all the end is death

A story so real that we can all feel

Filled with worries, sadness, and lies

A story with happiness, anger, and fear

Where the end.....is always we die

Its called the end is death

I wrote it 2 years ago but nobody judged seriously because i was 13 years old

Answer 1

It`s okay I wouldn`t say you would be the poetic idol; it just needs a little work. My favorite part of it was,

"With different beginnings, middles, and ends

With different parents, customs, and friends

With people, places, and beliefs to defend

Yet, through it all the end is death."