Just a brief few bars 2 check out if u would and give some feedback?

Question

I'm comin out like the sun blazin', half man half amazing, my flows eratic, u fiend like a dope addict, for this record label, we turnin tables, and twistin' heads, u dream of makin cheese, we breakin bread, it's Krazie Kracker, don't fu@k with the X factor, i'll unleash with the fury of a natural disaster, inside, my mind, i find myself in solitude, violence is obsolete, my vocabulary's enough to silence u, I carry big words and i'm not speakin softly, step up or step off, bit@h, back the h**l off me, don't cross me, or I will cancel u, this the end of the beginning, and now i'm lettin loose.

Answer 1

I think you have the ability to write... However, your writing is geared more towards hostility.  You seem to have an imagination and want to make something different... Why not try something that makes you think?  There are so many great rappers out there that made some truly great records (Tupac, etc), and they all had meaning and heart to it... Something you rarely see nowadays.  

And no offense whatsoever, but Krazie Kracker might not be a good alias to go by :P