Just looking for some feedback on a poem I wrote awhile ago?

Question

-Angel's Wings-

Fallen They call me

Fallen I am

Crimson wings to lift thee

Wings of the Lamb

Tears of blood I cry

Falling as I fly

Feathers of white turn to pink

A war is brewing

It won't be what you think

All of us wooing

Constantly pursuing

Those that we love

Conflict and pain

Hatred & Doubt

Without them, no gain

Never knowing what Life's about

Never know what there is to gain

Always wanting to be insane

Life slowly being stolen

Love always on the edge

Darkness fades to Light

Hate to Love

Death to Life

Dreams become Reality

Evil becomes Good

And I, the Fallen, rise again

Sword in hand, the battle begins

Dark becomes Light

Light becomes Dark

Yin and Yang

Those who were felled

Rise again as Children of the White

And I return to purity

Pink wings become white

Legacy becomes Excalibur

All of Heaven sings

As the one I love is

Embraced in my Angel Wings

-2/9/04

Answer 1

oh wow..

your uhh-maziin.. i really like it.

the title goes along well

and then everything is there for a reason, like nothing is completely random. not only tat but you used rhymes in all the rite places.

i also write poems and my poems are touchin and meaningful just like yours. so i can connect and i must say i love it

Answer 2

thats great! ur really good. i try to write like that. u should submit it somewhere!!!

will you fix my poem?

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ill even give u credit.

seriously tho. thats an awesome poem. u can submit it on poetry.com and get an award if they like it! ill vote for u if u do :)